The waterfalls cascaded from the crest snaked through the bosom of the surrounding highlands and merged into the pristine creek. A breathtaking, ideal setting to dive into the vows of eternal love.
“I do.” They pronounced in unison.
It was an exciting love story of a chivalrous prince who saved the damsel in distress, followed by a whirlwind courtship, and finally the plunge of, “Until death do us part.”
Beck unmindfully twirled the tapestries around the canopy and reminisced their nuptial ceremonies. Her laced nightgown rustled as she propped herself on the pillow with her elbow. The cleavage on her bosom rippled as she heaved.
“We spent our first anniversary among family, friends and well-wishers. Not that I have a grievance, but I suggest let us go on an adventure for our second. A couple of weeks remain. It is becoming a bit uninteresting here over the days. What do you say, Honey?”
The tall masculine physique of Brendon stooped over the writing-table, deep in concentration over the flow of his pen on the sheets. He nodded without a glance or a verbal response.
Beck sulked, pulled up her petite self, and walked towards the casement. A light wind from yonder blew the silk curtains and her golden locks. A chill ran down her spine. She gazed towards the black narrow winding path from the manor towards the moors. A sliver of the moon reflected its faint light and the silhouettes danced around the vast coppices. She has never ventured towards the end of the trail.
Beck felt uncomfortable, but the warm breath on her small shoulders, the passionate kiss on her neck and the smooth flow of the firm fingers on her satin skin made her heart skip a thousand beats.
“Love, accept my sincere apologies for disregarding your requests. My thoughts though engrossed in my novel, still yearns for our never-ending love story.”
Beck painfully looked into his turquoise eyes, “My positive mind states, there will be a merry ending.”
Brendon sighed, “So be it, Love. Twice, I was unsuccessful. My desire to present you with the greatest gift of our lives was futile, during and after our first anniversary. I also could not complete my new novel, but I am not to lose hope. There are possibilities I am reckoning, so for our second anniversary, I have planned a secret rendezvous for us. My novel will also see the light of day based on my perception.”
“As per my recollections, you are yet to select a name for your novel. Am I correct?” Beck queried.
Brendon nodded in agreement, “Absolutely.”
“Pardon my audacity, but I have thought of something after you recited the passages to me.”
Brendon listened with full attention and eagerness. A brief pause later, Beck declared, “How about…. ‘And thus their Love story began’. Is it in agreement with your ideas and taste?”
“So shall it be! Spare me a minute, Love, before I join you in bed. I am aware it’s midnight, but I want to inscribe it, now.”
They held each other and spoke in whispers as the crepuscular creatures filled the alfresco and compensated on their behalf.
It was their second year of wedding celebrations. It was also significant for their survival, and their last chance from the path to perdition.
Brendon made elaborate arrangements. They disembarked from a four-horse-driven carriage that brought them to the edge of the moorland, which was a cul-de-sac. The hues and fragrance of the tulips and lilies filled the surroundings. A cozy chalet with red tiles stood on the slope. The hussar transported their luggage inside and left. The vermillion sprinkled horizon mirrored the exhilaration of the two longing souls.
A matron appeared and placed a bottle of red wine and two chalices on the stone top. The tray also contained the choicest cheese, ripe berries, cold-cut meat and freshly baked Fougasse. She bowed and vanished.
Brendon poured the drinks, offered and raised, “Are you ready, my Love?”
Beck nodded and toasted, “To a joyful ending, and thus their love story began.”
Brendon twirled the liquid and ushered Beck. “My final opportunity to bestow you a blissful life. Let this prospect be fruitful forever.”
They strolled hand-in-hand towards the fringe of the blind alley and stared at the rift. The truant tufts of clouds revealed the lunar luminosity through a veil of mist. It was a full-moon night, the perfect hour for the union. The wait was finally over.
They threw their goblets, breathed and looked at each other with trepidation. In harmony, they chanted, “Until death do us part.”
The red wine gurgled and oozed from their mouths. The shroud of haze flew past, and the gleam of the moonlight lit up Beck’sappearance. Gradually, the purple tinge encompassed her body and face with one shut-eye. The surroundings swathed in darkness. The blood moon reflected her entangled hair, jutted teeth and sharp pointed nails.
Brendon swung in stride; Beck firmly held his hand. His thick eyebrows met at the bridge of his nose, the elongated ears drooped, the stretched fingers curved, and the protruding bristles under his tongue became visible.
She hissed, and he roared. Their wild passions displayed in all flavours under the altering glow of the moonshine. At last, they found their love in eternity. The droplets of blood drooped from their bodies and formed a stream that flowed into the fissure. The vampire and the werewolf were reunited. They plunged into the abyss of obscurity, and vanquished the curse of the undead from the lives of Beck and Brendon.
“Good Morning, Love. Happy Second. Long live the Princess and the Prince. Peace be with us.” Brendon beamed and kissed the dry pale lips of Beck.
“Blessed Freedom, my Honey. Cheers to a new beginning on our second anniversary. Now, your novel got a satisfied ending and the perfect name I suggested. Let us celebrate.” Beck winked and grinned.
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Ah.. the twist.
Made for an enjoyable read.
Spotted just one tense mismatch, and one format error (lack of spacing)
Nothing major as far as Grammar errors go.
Could have been crisper though.
Nevertheless, a good attempt.
7/10
Interesting story with an unexpected twist. Gave me twilight feels. Very visual and rich imagery.
I felt it needed tighter editing.
7/10
The vocabulary was outstanding and contributed significantly to the enigmatic, old world charm.
Very graphic, vivid imagery.
The suspense and the twist worked well. The prompt was fully justified.
Noticed a couple of verb mix-ups. Would have liked to know a bit about their background which led to their current predicament…may be by omitting a few descriptive bits.
On the whole, I found it very entertaining and enjoyed reading it.
My rating: 8 on 10.
Loved the unusual ending!… never for a second could guess it… vampire n warewof union … impeccable use of language… my rating 8/10
An interesting tale with an unexpected twist. I enjoyed the different approach taken.The author has done very well to transport the reader to the scene with appropriate vocabulary, dialogues, and character mannerisms. I just felt in between it stretched just a tad bit. My rating 7.5 / 10
An interesting tale with an unexpected twist. I enjoyed the different approach taken. The author has done very well to transport the reader to the scene with appropriate vocabulary, dialogues, and character mannerisms. I just felt in between it stretched just a tad bit. My rating 7.5 / 10
An interesting story with an unusual and unexpected ending. The language was c in keeping with the medieval setting. A few grammatical errors but that’s a minor point. I found it a bit difficult to visualize the setting and found the dialogues a bit too formal. The narrative was va bit junpy, but I am guessing that was due to the word limit and time.
Liked the very different take on the prompt and the imaginative setting. Rate this at a 6/10.
An interesting story with an unusual and unexpected ending. The language was c in keeping with the medieval setting. A few grammatical errors but that’s a minor point. I found it a bit difficult to visualize the setting and found the dialogues a bit too formal. The narrative was a bit jumpy, but I am guessing that was due to the word limit and time.
Liked the very different take on the prompt and the imaginative setting. Rate this at a 6/10.
Honestly I could not relate to the characters first. On reading a second time I grasped the gist of the story. An interesting concept. Good language. The story dragged a bit somewhere, but did fair justice to the prompt.
Well written. 7/10
The setting was well established. The end was unexpected but interesting. Path to perdition..hmm interesting word choice.
The language was top class, though the story could have had a tighter editing. Too many adjectives? Or may be its just my thoughts.
Rating 7.5/10
Vivid Imagery, smooth language and an unexpected twist, made an interesting read.
My rating 7.5/10
The language of the story was undoubtedly magnificent and beautiful. But I somehow felt to have lost somewhere in between the story and couldn’t follow it at some points. But end was well twisted and applaud to author’s imagination. My rating 7/10.
Liked the unexpected twist. The language was great and brought out the fantasy world well. Interesting setting. I’d have liked to learn more about the curse and why the second anniversary was important to break it. Could have been better with tighter editing. Rating: 6.5/10
A unique take on the prompt. Beautiful language and descriptions. Enjoyed the twist in the end.
My rating : 8.2/10
A unique take on the prompt. Beautiful language and descriptions. Enjoyed the twist in the end.
My rating 8.2/10
Wow! Dark, romantic , magical and what not. Loved the different narration sprinkled with rich vocabulary.
An out-of-the-world take on the prompt, though I felt this story could not be done a full justice in a 1000-word story format. A reader is left wanting for more details.
Rating 7
Twilight of the yesteryears! Quite nicely done! I read it a second time to grasp the story well. The author has adhered well to the prompt. Enjoyed the dark romance. My rating is 7/10
Hi,
A very interesting story…I always find it difficult to write romance and fantasies too aren’t a strong point of mine. I really loved the romanticism that’s highlighted through the vivid descriptions in the story. The opening lines were breathtaking. Also, the chemistry between the characters was sensual and the romance palpable. The ending was a twist. But I was a little confused towards the end. It almost felt like it was taken from the middle of a bigger story. Also, I did not get what was the curse that they broke. Maybe I missed something. On the whole, it was a engaging story and had some great descriptions and an engrossing storyline.
Oh sorry, I forgot to leave a rating. My rating is 6.5/10.
Okay. I couldn’t wrap my head around it at all. Prince and princesses, vampire, werewolves, the dated dailect. I couldn’t decide where the book ended and the real life began. My bad.
Language top notch.
6/10 for the language.
The story steers you through a prince saves damsel to a vampire unites with werewolf ending in a smooth narrative and an unexpected ending while you wait for the second anniversary to happen. Nice twist at the end. May have been an even better story had the word limit not impeded free flow from the writer’s keyboard. Nice read. 7/10